Rommel sat at the end of the couch wearing a long, sad face…
*sigh*
He noticed the phone beside him… hesitantly, he picked it up, and slowly dialed a number. He wasn’t even looking, it’s as if his fingers have a mind of their own, knowing just which numbers to push.
*R-r-r-r-i-i-i-i-i-n-g*
He felt nervous as he heard the phone rings at the other end…
*R-r-r-r-i-i-i-i-i-n-g*
Rommel almost wanting to hang up
*R-r-r-r-i-i-i-i-i-n-g*
Third ring and still no answer, just one more and he will hang up
*R-r-r-r-i-i-i-i-i-n-g*
“Okay, that’s it. She can’t say I did not try,” Rommel said to himself. He was about to hang up when suddenly he heard a voice from the other line.
“We’re sorry, the number you are calling seems to be unattended or out of the coverage area. Please try your call again later. Thank you.”
Rommel only sighed… he misses his girlfriend. They had a fight two days ago and she asked for breathing space. Now, he realized how much she means to him.
“We’re sorry, the number you are calling seems to be unattended or out of the coverage area. Please try your call again later. Thank you.”
He paused for a while, as he listened to the monotonous voice of the lady at the other line.
“We’re sorry, the number you are calling seems to be unattended or out of the coverage area. Please try your call again later. Thank you.”
Rommel took a deep breath before he started to speak, “Hello Liza. I’m really sorry about the other day, I hope you can forgive me. I miss you, Liza. I need you.”
“We’re sorry, the number you are calling seems to be unattended or out of the coverage area. Please try your call again later. Thank you.” The monotonous voice continued without missing a beat.
Oblivious of the voice on the other line, Rommel went on talking. “Please, Liza. Give me another chance. I promise I’ll change. I’ll be a better man!”
“We’re sorry, the number you are calling seems to be unattended or out of the coverage area. Please try your call again later. Thank you.” The message went on, even as Rommel speaks.
“Please Liza,” Rommel continued to plead, “give me another chance. I beg you, Liza. I love you!”
“We’re sorry, the number you are calling seems to be unattended or out of the coverage area. Please try your call again later. Thank you.”
“Just tell me what I need to do to make you come back to me, Liza. I need you, Liza. I love you. Please believe me!”
“We’re sorry, the number you are calling seems to be unattended or out of the coverage area. Please try your call again later. Thank you.”
“Please Liza,” Rommel’s voice was almost crying… he was in fact crying, “come back to me Liza.”
“We’re sorry, the number you are calling seems to be unattended or out of the coverage area. Please try your call again later. Thank you.”
“Liza, please….” his voice now trembling
“We’re sorry… WILL YOU CUT THAT OUT. YOU KNOW I CAN’T STAND YOU CRYING! AND DON’T CALL ME AT WORK, DO YOU WANT ME TO GET FIRED?!”
“Liza, I can’t stand to lose you. I miss you. I love you, Liza.”
“I love you too, honey. And to be honest, I miss you too, but I just need some time off to think.”
“Please come back to me”
“Okay, you win. I’ll call you soon. Now, why don’t you be a good boyfriend and put down the phone so I can get back to work. You don’t want me to get fired, do you?”
“No honey, I don’t want that to happen. Promise you’ll call me?”
“Yes, I will. Now, can I get back to work?”
“Yes honey, you may. Thank you very much. I love you, honey.”
“We’re sorry, the number you are calling seems to be unattended or out of the coverage area. Please try your call again later. Thank you.”
*click*
Tags: cool off, Fiction, Humor, love story, reunited, Romance, telephone
::laugh::
I was starting to catch on just before you got to the punchline. Very good!
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Roy Reply:
June 2nd, 2010 at 3:20 am
I was planning to drag Rommel’s monologue longer, but I felt that was too much of a giveaway
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Hello Roy,
He he he…talaga lang ha…di ba automated iyan…sige na nga…it was a fun read. keep writing.
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Roy Reply:
June 2nd, 2010 at 7:29 am
hehe… who knows, Jen.
malay natin. for all we know…
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Certainly not used to a story with so much dialog but I really like it. Trying to finally start writing myself but the truly short story has never been something I could get down.
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That’s hilarious!Your awesome. Ive always wanted to write a blog like this, I just can’t seem to do it!
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i like the story, very nice
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I liked the twist. I honestly didn’t see it coming. I just thought the main character was going for a cry of desperation by spilling his guts to an automated voice service. Good ending too.
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Nice. Well done.
Guessed the ending when the monologue started but still very crisp! good job
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ha ha ha.your writing is awesom.nice.
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lol..
that was really good..I know few people who really talk to the automated voice(?).
very nice ..very nice…
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