Narrator: it was the first day of school and the students we’re very excited to know their sections.
Cinderella: “Veronica, wait for me!“
Veronica: “Faster!“
Cinderella: “I want to know what my section is. Please wait for me. “
(Travis & Cinderella bump to each other & Cinderella’s things fell)
Travis: “Are you ok Miss? “
Cinderella: “Yes I’m fine, sorry I’m just in a hurry.”
Narrator: Cinderella leaves without getting to know what the boy’s name is. Travis saw a small notebook left by Cinderella.
Travis: “Wait! Miss, you forgot your notebook!”
Narrator: Cinderella didn’t notice that she forgot her diary with $100. When they were already back at their dorm, Cinderella noticed that her diary was missing.
Cinderella: “Veronica, did you see my diary.”
Veronica: “No, why? Is it missing?”
Cinderella: “umm… yeah.”
Veronica: “How about your $100?”
Cinderella: “It’s in my diary. Now, I should find work to raise that amount. “
Veronica: “But how?”
Cinderella: “I don’t know.”
Narrator: Travis kept the diary with him, wishing that she would see Cinderella again. The next day, after school Cinderella went straight to a cafeteria near them. There she met Devi and Levi, her classmates.
Devi: “Hi Cinderella! Are you going to apply here?”
Cinderella: “Umm… yes”
Levi: “Just leave your application to us, we’ll give it”
Narrator: Cinderella was hired after applying. One day, while the students we’re taking their recess, the cleaners were asked to clean the room.
Miss Jen: “Class you may take your recess. Cleaners, please stay and clean.”
Levi: “You heard it already Cinderella, why don’t you clean yet?”
Cinderella: “But I’m not a cleaner.”
Devi: “This is your practice for your work.”
Levi: “Come on Devi, let’s leave her so she can clean well.”
Cinderella: “But…”
Narrator: Meanwhile, Miss Jen talked to Travis in the Faculty’s room
Miss. Jen: “May I ask a favor Travis?”
Travis: “What is it ma’am?”
Miss Jen: “I want you to keep an eye on Devi and Levi, but be sure they won’t see you.”
Travis: “Why?”
Miss Jen: “Just don’t ask, why ok?”
Travis: “Yes ma’am.”
Narrator: At recess time, after Devi and Levi finished eating at, they went straight to Veronica.
Levi: “Hi Vern, what you doing?”
Veronica: “I’m reviewing for the test.”
Devi: “Is that so? May we join you later at lunch?”
Veronica: “Umm… Sure, let’s just meet here.”
Devi: “Deal, be sure to come ‘cause will wait for you.”
Narrator: Recess has ended, and the students went straight to their classroom to take a test. Veronica got the highest score in the test. At lunch time, Veronica went straight to the cafeteria we’re Devi and Levi said they will meet.
Levi: “Sorry we’re late.”
Veronica: “No, it’s ok. Anything you want?”
Devi: “I want a very cold C2”
Levi: “Me too.”
Veronica: “By the way, what made you talk to me? “
Levi: “Oh, we almost forgot “
Devi: “We want to be with you.”
Levi: “Yeah, can you teach us?”
Veronica: “Teach what?”
Levi: “Anything”
Veronica: “I don’t understand”
Devi: “The truth is…”
Levi: “We want you to be famous like us.”
Veronica: “What if I don’t want to.”
Devi: “You can have anything you ask for”
Veronica: “Sorry, but I really don’t want to”
Levi: “Please, just come with us instead of Cinderella”
Veronica: “I get it! You just want that Cinderella would be alone, right?”
Levi: “Exactly!”
Veronica: “Sorry, but I don’t want to. I can’t leave my friend.”
Levi and Devi: “Please Vern! Please, please, please, please!”
Narrator: The three girls didn’t notice that Travis was there, listening to them.
Travis: “Levi, Devi, why do you want Cinderella to be alone?”
Levi: “It’s something personal, and none of your business!”
Devi: “Don’t mind what Levi said Travis. By the way, can you be the lucky guy to dance with me in cheerleading dance competition?”
Travis: “You talk as if I didn’t hear what you were saying before”
Levi: “Why are you listening to us?”
Travis: “Umm… It’s time already, I got to go!”
Devi: “Travis! Wait! Please, wait for me! Wait!”
Narrator: Travis went straight to the Miss Jen’s classroom.
Travis: “Miss Jen, that was so close!”
Miss Jen: “What is it? Tell me?”
Narrator: Travis told Miss Jen what he heard.
Ms. Jen: “Is that so? As soon as you reach your classroom, tell Devi, Levi and Veronica to go to the principal’s office, and also Cinderella.”
Travis: “But I don’t know who Cinderella is.”
Miss Jen: “Just ask to Veronica, she’s her classmate.”
Narrator: The bell rings and lunch ended but Cinderella only ate 1 piece of doughnut inside the classroom.
Travis: “Devi, Levi, Veronica and Cinderella, Miss Lynn wants to talk to the 4 of you later after dismissal.”
Devi: “Why?”
Cinderella: “We’ll go”
Narrator: When class ended and dismissal came, the four girls went straight to principal’s office.
Cinderella: “Good afternoon Miss Lynn, Travis said you want to talk to us.”
Miss Lynn: “Not actually to you, I want to talk to Devi and Levi.”
Devi: “What is it madam, are we going to get a promotion?”
Miss Lynn: “No, because of your misbehavior, you two will have a two-week suspension”
Devi: “What?! But… but….”
Levi: “Are we allowed to go the cheerleading dance competition?”
Miss Lynn: “Yes, but you will have to organize your room, without anybody’s help. Only the two of you.”
Narrator: September 12 came, Cheerleading Dance Competition started, Travis and Cinderella are now getting to know each other better.
Travis: “May I dance with you?”
Cinderella: “Sure, why not.”
Narrator: While dancing, Travis got something from his coat and gave it to Cinderella who was so surprised.
Travis: “I think this notebook belongs to you?”
Cinderella: “Thanks! Now, I don’t need any more to work in the cafeteria.”
The Author: Angel is my 11 year old daughter, the youngest in the family and the only woman in my life.
She wrote this script for their club presentation when they were asked to come up with a modern-day version of the Cinderella story.
Tags: 11 years old, Angel, Cinderella, fairy tale, modern day version, school presentation, Script, young romance, young writer
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Roy, Angel has access to your blog? Please tell her congratulations on her story. Ahehehe. She writes well. Must be in her genes.
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Hi Jan! I showed your comment to her and she just smiled. ‘was asking her to reply, but she begged off.
She’s not use to receiving such compliments
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Angel this is good. Consider yourself a writer and blogger from now on. Roy, she should write a daily journal in her own blog to hone her writing skills. You can do it , Angel. Go for it!
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Roy Reply:
October 17th, 2009 at 3:32 am
Hi Jen,
like Jan’s comment, Angel refused to reply hehe… she’s still coy, although I told her beforehand that she’ll be receiving comments and she can reply. Apparently, she’s still not getting the hang of it hehe…
Thanks for the encouragement!
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A writer in the making… Good job, Angel.
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Hello, 11 year old dearie. you’ve got a wonderful Cinderella story. Keep it up little girl!
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Congrats on your story Angel. Keep up the good work!
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excellent writing job, Angel! congrat, roy!
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Hi Angel!
Tito Z here. Congratulations with your screen play. How about a videoblog next time.
I guess dad and the bros can help with the scenes. he he he.
Keep writing.
Z
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Angel, well done! I was about your age when I discovered that I had a passion for writing. I took a few detours off the path, over the years, and tried other things…but always, in the end, came back to writing. I hope you keep it up.
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An 11-year old writer! Incredible yet true. Congrats, Angel! You’ll be going far successfully. God bless!
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smart daughter you have there. nice reading her story
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Wow! i am a huge fan of Cinderella stories and was really surprised that a kid created this. When i was her age, i used to write such stories too and yeah.. she’s really great for a kid…
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Wow! That was really good. Great job, Angel. Keep up the good work!
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very good story! this girl is really talent in writing stories… and i just like the topic ^_^
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That was a good one for a child.
Some kids have it in them. Its just waiting to be discovered.
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Congrats Angel i never thought that such as young as you are can make it. Indeed, it’s really in your blood. Keep up the good work!
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that was a really good story . . . i loved it . . . it was very sweet . . . byee
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Surprise!! she is an amazing little girl that I never seen before. Please keep her write it continoues, she will be a good writer.
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